6 thoughts on “Summer Song”

1. Ann Koplow July 26, 2014 at 11:03 pm

   Your poetry reduces nothing, Jeff. Thank you.

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   1. Jeff Schwaner Post authorJuly 27, 2014 at 8:47 pm

      Thank you Ann. Always great to see you here!

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2. S.C. Hickman July 26, 2014 at 11:26 pm

   I like the way “bars/closing” and “rains/rising” play off each other in the timing… excellent!

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   1. Jeff Schwaner Post authorJuly 27, 2014 at 8:47 pm

      Thanks much, SC–

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3. magicpoet01 July 27, 2014 at 11:03 am

   This poem reads rhythmically very well, it also shows your influence from Japanese writing perhaps. It is tight language with the focus on sound in the first stanza and leading to the steam rising from the roads. Yet we know it is also from the hot mating of the bike riders who leave the bar. So much and so subtle!

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   1. Jeff Schwaner Post authorJuly 27, 2014 at 8:51 pm

      Thanks MP for that close reading. If we do our job right there is a lot to read into four lines, right?

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